tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-559260659330383107.post2639450595977589040..comments2011-05-31T14:41:44.423+02:00Comments on Writing Year Nine: GreeceMr Ishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09134227545197323665noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-559260659330383107.post-65205680636154693002011-02-05T14:48:36.674+01:002011-02-05T14:48:36.674+01:00I want to go there now! Fantastic writing, Elin. J...I want to go there now! Fantastic writing, Elin. Just a few language points below.<br />We need to talk about possesive apostrophes.<br /><br />1. "It is not enough with just bathing and tanning" > Either, remove "with", or begin "Bathing and tanning alone are not enough"<br /><br />2. "It was a sight that was not of this world" > The views were out-of-this world, perhaps. The problem is beginning the sentence with "It" as the last thing you mentioned was going cycling, so the "It" seems to refer to that.<br /><br />3. "the olive- lemon- and orange trees" > No hyphens needed.<br /><br />4. "I went out with my newfound friends that I had met at the hotel" > ... friends, who I had met... ..... volleyball with, ...<br /><br />Remind me to talk about That, who and which, and commas in relative clauses.<br /><br />5. "The people who servesare his two daughters husbands" > people who serve are his two daughters' husbands ... (or two sons-in-law)<br /><br />Similarly: "his sons wife" > his son's wife<br /><br />6. "smalltalk" > small talk<br /><br />7. "members in the family" > members of the family<br /> <br />8. "that is how relaxing it will ever get" > that is as relaxing as it will ever get.Mr Ishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09134227545197323665noreply@blogger.com